What do you think? ""LOOK""

[(\^/) Lotuspoint Joe (\^/)]

Well i have added some more pages to the Stud Directory
can you all tell me please what you think of the overall outlook and what else would really go well on the site

www.stud-directory.co.uk

CHEERS

[suewhitmore]

Jo, I like the site, but the grammar makes it look very amateur, particularly the incorrect use of the apostrophe. "This-Years-Charity" should be "This Year's Charity" - the apostophe denotes "belonging to" - without the apostrophe the year is plural. There is the opposite error in your heading "~ Charity's - Club's - Society's ~" I presume this is meant to be plural and so should read "~ Charities - Clubs - Societies ~".

BTW "Copyright" is one word and should not contain random capitalisation.

I know most young people don't recognise poor grammar, but it sticks out a mile for us older people and is very offputting. Generally speaking, we are the ones who would be paying to advertise on your site.

Catrin who posts here is extremely good at proof reading, she may help you out if you pm her. If you are thinking of doing more of this sort of thing, you might find the book "Eats, shoots and leaves" very helpful.

[horsiehelen]

Another great book on the same lines as Sue mentioned is Bill Bryson's Troublesome Words.

[wally]

Eats shoots and leaves

Eats, shoots and leaves,

Eats shoot's and leaves

Read the book it's great fun.

Sadly I live in a household of grammar anoraks. I am a poor typer, and tend to leave my typos in on fora.

My OH would kill me if I made any grammar gaffs on an official website.

[lizziee]

Again? This is the THIRD time you've posted this Presumably the mods keep taking it down because it's advertising? Could be wrong of course....

[(\^/) Lotuspoint Joe (\^/)]

Lizziee this is not advertising it is ONLY asking questions from real horse owners to improve the site

[suewhitmore]

The thing is Lizziee, the grammar on the site obstructs the content, so it doesn't matter. Most of the people from this site get no further than looking at the spelling.

[lizziee]

Ah, yes, see what you mean. I didn't really look at it before. Could do with a leeetle more work Not just the copy either

[Deleted]

At the risk of upsetting Joe again, I'm afraid my reaction is a little like Lizziee's.

But, some constructive comments: I personally perfer websites that are uncluttered, concise, well written and well illustrated. If advice or services are being offered, I would like to know on what authority, what qualifications are held, etc. For example, looking at your equine behaviourist section, it would be better to say where you studied behaviourism and why you chose this route over other training methods. You have to sell yourself. BTW the grammar on that page also needs just a little attention.

If you are going to offer website services, you'd be better doing it on a separate site. Also, I personally would expect a great looking site from someone charging to develop one for me.

Just a question, too, if you are on the one hand saying you use the Dually with most of your horses, why are you selling a different product? It comes across as you selling a your second choice of equipment, if you see what I mean.

Something else that is confusing is that you website says it is an on-line directory, but then it appears to be anything but.

I would also suggest that some photos would make it look more appealing.

I'm sorry it's all negative, but you did ask and I'm only trying to be helpful.